Print ad

[snousle]

I'm placing my first print ad in Mendocino Arts, a gallery guide coming out in July. It will be about 4 1/2" wide and take up 1/6th of the page. The printing is pretty high quality, so I hope it comes out OK, since a lot of things end up darker on the page than I expect. Here's my first stab at it:



Additional thought - Is the word "small" a problem? I wonder if it has the right connotations. I don't want to work with large numbers of guests, but no event is ever "small" in the mind of the host. I'm not getting any better ideas, though. It's kind of hard pitching a service that people may not have thought about before.

Comments

[muckefuck.livejournal.com]

I'm hating the comma. If it's a caesura you want, there should be some graphical way of introducing it.

[snousle.livejournal.com]

It's either that or I have to abuse an apostrophe. Good grammar is looked upon with suspicions in these parts. LOL.

Seriously though, what would you suggest? After staring at these things for a while, nothing looks right.

[muckefuck.livejournal.com]

You've got three separate notions here:

enjoy elegant dining
in your own home
at restaurant prices

You need to tweak the wording in order to get them of roughly the same length so you can partition them more or less the way I have above. As for issues of spacing, font, and so forth, there I defer to the layout specialists. (If there are fewer than a half dozen on you flist, I'll be shocked.)

[broduke2000.livejournal.com]

Ahem:

nothing looks right.

Incorrect Grammar Usage = nothing looks correct.

But your English teacher will let you off the hook, considering your locale, and your fine, mouth-watering graphic display ad.